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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many countries have increased the number of
people
that
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suffering from health problems
as a result
 of overconsumption
in
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 fast
food
.
Therefore
,
the
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governments
 should impose a higher
tax
 on
this
 type of
food
. It is a tendency to believe that fast
food
 is the most
convenience
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food
 for
people
 to purchase.
However
,
this
 kind of
food
 contains very less nutrition and makes
people
 unhealthy. I believed that the government should concern about the policy to help the citizens remain
in
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 healthy diets. According to
this
 point of view, there are plenty
types
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 of
food
 that we can consume nowadays. Unfortunately, the healthy
foods
 or organic
foods
 in today are very expensive so most of
people
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 do not hesitate themselves to buy fast
foods
 even though it contains more sugar and salt which leads to many diseases
such
 as Diabetes or Hypertension.
In addition
, the
governments
 should act on
this
 problem by
impose
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 a higher
tax
 on fast
food
 including the companies and products.
For instance
,
increasing
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 in
tax
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the tax
a tax
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of
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food
 products can cost high prices in fast
food
; thereby fast
foods
 and organic
foods
are cost
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 the same prices.
This
 can alternate
people
 to consume organic and healthy
foods
 without concern about the prices. 
However
, the higher
tax
in
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foods
 causes
the
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 higher
of
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living costs.
Thus
, the
governments
 should improve in multi- collaboration systems including the economy systems
such
 as salary payments and local financials of everybody in society. In conclusion, there are many drawbacks of fast
foods
 which are the most popular
food
 in the current time. I agreed that the
governments
 should launch the policy to improve the quality of health in the
people
 as well as the quality of living in
the
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society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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