Nowadays, families are not close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to it. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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it is becoming increasingly popular these days for

families

to get used to living apart.

This

phenomenon is the fruit of globalisation which makes it easy for everyone to decide where to live.

Although

some people might see

this

as a

postive

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positive

development, in my opinion, the downsides outweigh

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the

benefits.

This

essay will explore my view in more details. It is not uncommon these days to hear people living their

families

and loved ones to find a better job somewhere far away from home. In ,fact globalization facilitates

this

immigration.

This

makes them not be able to visit their close

relatives

for a long period of time, making a big gap between

families

For instance

, it is very common to see young couples moving to different countries in the hope of finding a better job, later they start their family in the new country while the rest of their

relatives

are still in their home town. In

this

case, their

kids

can not see their grandparents and another sibling sometimes for years.

Thus

, creating a big gap between

families

can be the result of globalization. Despite lots of advantages that was claimed for immigration, which includes finding a better job, having access to higher education and get away from financial upheaval some countries might face, immigration has caused more harm than goods.

First

and foremost, it has caused the new generation to loose sense of belongings due to not having to get to see their

relatives

like grandparents, aunts and uncles. it is crucial for

kids

to have a sense of family. Sometimes, even one of the parents can not join and has to stay in their own country to work and support the rest of the family in order for

kids

to have better access to education.

This

can lead to an increase in the number of single parenting because when they live apart, they will lose their connection and make them get used to single life and putting

kids

in a high level of anxiety and other types of mental health. It is my belief that globalization has caused isolation by separating

families

and causing physical and

as a result

emotional distance between

relatives

This

has

also

impacted the new generation directly and indirectly by putting them through lots of anxiety

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

384 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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