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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Significant
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amount
 of
waste
materials
 and garbages are getting produced by most
of
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the
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people
 in the modern era.In my
opinion
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 the fundamental reason for
this
 issue is the lack of knowledge and common
sence
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sense
 among the citizens of our country.
Firstly
, the absence of proper knowledge towards using the material which
are
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 not decomposable is the prior reason
of
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 rubbish increment in recent days.Not taking attention
towards
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to
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 the impact of
waste
materials
 on the communities and not using the proper guidelines to dump the
waste
products
are
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is
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 the effect of
large
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a large
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amount
 of garbage. Another point to consider is
the
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industrialization.From
last
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the last
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 recent
years
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,years
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 the development of the country involving new technologies
have
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 been extraordinary.
However
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,However
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this
 rapid infrastructure process
also
 bringing the abundance
amount
 of
waste
 and
unusuable
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unusable
products
 day by day which
consequently
impacing
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impacting
impact
 our
environement
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environment
 and having
detrimental
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a detrimental
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 effect on
the
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people
 health and social life.
On the other
hand
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 the lack of resources and
a
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proper guidelines are missing to influence
people
 to limit the use of
materials
which
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that
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 are not reusable. With regards to the
governments
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government's
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 steps and
involvment
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involvement
involving
 to mitigate
this
 problem is
significatly
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significantly
 crucial.
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Government
Govenment
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The govenment
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 should
banned
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ban
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 all the bags
materials
for instance
 Plastic which can not be used again and
instead
 influence and aware
socities
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societies
 to use bags made of paper and other
usuable
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usable
products
.They should
also
 start a campaign to make the citizen of the country aware of their
responsibity
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responsibility
 as a role model to others. In conclusion, the important reasons
of
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 producing
waste
products
 are
people
 awareness,carelessness and the rapid development of new factories and industrial areas.
Government
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The government
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 should come up with
significant
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a significant
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amount
 of solutions like banning plastic bags and starting a movement to eradicate
this
 problem which
at
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 the end having
negative
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a negative
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 impact on our daily health and overall environment.
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