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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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More and more
people
 are believed to travel nowadays than
it
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 used to be a few decades ago. There could be several reasons for that due to an abundance of positive aspects of visiting other
countries
. It has become apparent in recent years that travelling has conquered
people
’s attention as the main activity during inhabitants’’ vacations.
First
 and foremost,
this
 has happened owing to
increasing
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 convenience of using fast public transport and decreasing
price
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the price
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 of hotels.
For example
, planes and
high speed
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 trains are easily available for a wide range of
people
 in big cities as well as in an urban area. The
second
 reason for the booming of
traveling
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 is
affordability
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the affordability
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 of travel trips for many. Since the industry rendered a vital part of income for a number of
countries
, governments have been striving to attract as many tourists as possible.
As a result
, a variety of new rules and regulations was imposed which in turn significantly facilitated border crossing and reduced expenses. It is obvious now that the industry has made great progress and become immensely popular not only among
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 class but
also
 among retired
people
. When it comes to the benefits of
traveling
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 it should be
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stated
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 that it is a splendid chance to broaden peoples’ horizons. While
people
 are
traveling
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 they are enriching themselves.
Secondly
, visiting other
countries
 is a perfect opportunity to practice
foreign
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 language and communicate with foreigners without limitations even though the Internet provides
this
 ability anywhere in the world. There are no doubts that alive collaboration excels in
productivity
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 of learning. In conclusion, as tourism has become paramount for some
countries
 and beneficial for many, more
people
 try to visit captivating places in other parts of the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economy pricing
  • Cultural exchange
  • International business
  • Heritage sites
  • Cosmopolitan
  • Global citizen
  • Study abroad
  • Standard of living
  • Destination
  • Itinerary
  • Online bookings
  • Digital nomad
  • Bucket list
  • Sustainable travel
  • Eco-tourism
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