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It is becoming increasingly popular to take a year off between finishing school and going to college. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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gap
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 between
school
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 and college has been becoming immensely popular among children nowadays.
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 advocacy ,
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, provides numerous benefits like financial stability and timeframe to think about a
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 career. On the downside, it can
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 make children lethargic towards the study and increase their desire for
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. In
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 essay, I will put light on both advantages and disadvantages. On the
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 hand, there are multifarious advantages of having an
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gap
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 between secondary and tertiary
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. The predominant
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 is students can earn and save
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 for their
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 prospects. By saying so, I mean that the
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 graduates can work in companies like McDonald's, KFC and Hungry Jacks to earn their livelihood and save some extra cents for their tuition fees.
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, teenagers will get time to think about the field in which they want to pursue their career. They can take suggestions from their elders or co-workers and
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 decide about their
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.
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, my friend took
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year
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gap
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 from
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 to travel and grasp others thought about social work. Currently, he is working as a case manager in Anglicare Victoria.
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, demerits can not be ignored.
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 of all, some students might become lazy to go back to their
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.
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 is because
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year
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gap
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 can change their state of mind in regards to
education
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. They might develop a thought that practical knowledge outweighed the academic degrees, which would result in a less number of students in colleges. Apart from
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, the desire for
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 among young adults during the
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 can proliferate,
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, they would continue to work rather than
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 to fulfil their thirst.
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, my father after completing secondary
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 never went back to
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 or college because his hunger for
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 increased during the
gap
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 between
school
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 and college. To conclude, having an
education
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gap
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 has both merits and demerits. It entirely depends upon an individual that how he handles his
one
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year
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 and what are his
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 plans. I suggest that a
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 in
studies
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 is worthwhile as it can make an individual financial stable and give some time to think about his
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.
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