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Some people say that technology such as mobile phones (cell phones) is destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Emerging technology impacts how
people
 socialize.
People
 casually communicate via phone and the intensity of face-to-face communication is reducing nowadays.
This
 impact of high usage of cell-
phones
 raised a debate. I personally agree with the notion of cell
phones
 replaces social interaction.
To begin
 with, the
first
 time the mobile phone was discovered, it constantly changed the way society communicated. It offered many features of entertainment which buffed the users. Even today, it is non-stop in releasing many new platforms to entertain, yet, intoxicate the users.
For instance
, Instagram has a story feature that allows updating the factual events that
occured
Correct your spelling
occurred
occur
 in 24 hours. It affects
people
 to upload their daily activities even when hanging out with friends.
People
 tend to fake it to look close to each other, while they actually engrossed in their own screen without having a deep interaction.
Furthermore
, mobile
phones
 cannot replace natural social interaction. The nature of the human as social beings to have kinships is unquestionable. Human needs to stay connected emotionally with their friends and family to keep them sane. The intimate conversation between two
people
 is full of a warm atmosphere.
That is
 something that communication via
phones
 does not have, the ambience in deep talks will strengthen the bonding. To conclude, human as social beings need to communicate naturally to have a strong kinship which is unreplaceable only by mobile
phones
 communication.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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