6. Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both of these two views and give your own opinion.

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an alarming rate across nations. Some
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of the opinion that there should be fixed
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believe that
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is very fast resulting in zero pending cases In a
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where the
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and motivation are taken into consideration;
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of ethics of law is maintained and so innocent
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will not be punished, even if one criminal escape.
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, there are two types of crimes: intentional and non-intentional.
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have kleptomania which is a mental illness and giving fixed
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to them will be unfair.
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the victim will be in a tormented situation and end up doing a
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. And so looking into
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and motivation should always be considered .Innocents do not deserve fixed
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unlike mentioned before.
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. To conclude, I am of the opinion that looking into the reason and
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while deciding a
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is a fair one as the code of ethics is followed.
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