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Many high school students take part time jobs. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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The majority of senior secondary pupils tend to do a
job
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 in their spare
time
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Although
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this
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 trend is gaining popularity among learners,
this
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 habit has numerous positive and negative impacts on them.
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 essay will analyse both sides in the upcoming stanzas.
To begin
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 with, having
a
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part-
time
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work
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 while studying not only helps to maintain
financial
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a financial
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 situation of the
students
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 but
also
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 provide
work
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 experience to them. To elaborate
further
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, high
school
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 pupils are no longer depend on their guardians for their pocket money. They start to manage their own expenses with the
helps
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help
bits of help
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 of earning income.
As a result
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, they try to avoid squander their hard-earned money on useless things.
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, a survey conducted by
the
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Cambridge University has revealed that more than 60%
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students
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of students
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 around the world are paying their
school
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 fees and handling other charges by their own salary merely. Apart from
this
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, many
students
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 like to do a
job
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for
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 obtaining
work
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 and social experience, which could be beneficial for them in their future life.
Therefore
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,
part-
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a part-time
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time
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job
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 has benefits for
students
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 which make them mature at
early
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an early
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 stage of life.
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, pupils who are studying at
secondary
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the secondary
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 level having certain problems due to
take
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 part-
time
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work
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.
Firstly
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, they do not have sufficient
time
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 to focus on their study. After having
school
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 they should have to spend a few hours at
workplace
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the workplace
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.
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, they are unable to complete their
school
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 tasks which effect
on
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student's performance at
school
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, owing to
hectic
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a hectic
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 schedule and without taking enough break for relaxing, they might be mentally and physically
fatigue
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fatigued
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.
This
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 will be the cause of having stress and anxiety for a long
time
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 among them.
Besides
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 these, there are more chances of misusing
of
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the earned money by the
students
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. They perhaps become drug or
alcoholic
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 addict as they will spend on these things without any trepidation.
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, part-
time
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work
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 influence on student's personal and academic life negatively. To recapitulate, in today's epoch most
of
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the
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high
school
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's
students
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 are looking for part-
time
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work
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 for establishing themselves
in
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at
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 younger age and sharing their
parents
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parent's
parents'
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 financial burden.
However
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, they must impart some
time
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 for them to keep themselves active and attain high grade in exam rather than running behind a few hours
job
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.
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