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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Well known personalities, play a significant role in our society. Influence on
people
 by famous
people
 is soaring drastically,
therefore
 whenever they try to
share
 their point of view on any general discussion, later, it generally becomes a statement. In
this
 essay, we will discuss, the various reasons why
this
 is a positive thing. I firmly agree with
this
 because, as it reflects a person's true personality. At the outset, it is natural and duty of every celebrity to
share
 their point of view, like rising prices of petrol and diesel and how it is affecting the common man.
In addition
 to it,
for instance
, new laws which have been introduced for farmers in India are actually against them, a huge number of
people
 are protesting against it but when a celebrity
share
 his or her point of view it becomes the headlines.
Moreover
, followers who were least bothered earlier becomes part of the discussion.
Hence
, they can influence or convey their message to an adequate group of
people
 with the help of various platforms
such
 as Facebook, Instagram etc.
Although
, popularity comes with a mixed bag of boom and bane, so on the destructive part, if they are unable to portray their thoughts in a proper manner. Many followers can go against them.
For instance
, if, an actor does an advertisement and promotes animal rights.
However
, at the same ,
time
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the time
a time
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 he himself eats meat and a frequent user of wollen which are made by the animal products shows he is fake on the screen.
Hence
, when acts are shown on the screen and gestures done by the famous actors, actually does not match help us to break the ice and get familiar with the other person's nature which indirectly forces us to think do we really wish to follow
this
 artist ? Despite being aware of the fact that personal life is gone, many well-known personalities still prefer to
share
 their opinion,
then
 it should be taken constructively.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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