Some people today struggle to use modern electronic technology such as smartphones and computers. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem?

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impact on today's world.
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most
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found it difficult to
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in their daily routine.
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the individual are feeling more comfortable in using old traditional ways. But I strongly believe that there are initiative can be taken to engage more population toward the advance technologies.
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with, one of the major reasons is that the old generation found it difficult to operate these devices. They found more comfort in using the old traditional ways. When they realize the alleviation in time gained due to
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of these gadgets, they will motivate to use these
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paper newspaper is very ordinary because
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it rather than using the mobile phones where the news from all around the world could be watched or read.
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paper production is damaging the billion
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trees, we prefer to use the newspaper rather than the new technologies.
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, there are many
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which could be done to
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is to educate
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the advantages of smart gadgets. Certainly, when they acknowledge the benefits of
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computers, they will love to spend their time using
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and abating
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, the positivity of saving times, ease of access and many more. Even though usage of old devices
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some own benefits, moving toward the new innovation is far more beneficial which has been invented to
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the environmental problems. In conclusion, despite the fact that
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grabbing new technologies for some
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is hard because of the domination of the old methods, showing them the good picture for using it will inspire them like training them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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