The best way to increase road safety is to make car drivers retake their driving test every year. Do you agree or disagree ?

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It is a disputable fact that retaking
driving
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test
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annually will solve the problems of
road
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accidents
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. I strongly disagree with
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its cons outweigh the pros. In the subsequent paragraphs, illustrate the reasons for my belief with relevant examples. The foremost reason is,
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a driving fest every year, will not give a guarantee to curtail
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accidents
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. Because most of the
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accidents
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took
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by dint of ignorance of traffic rules and regulations.
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,
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cases generally
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when a driver
drunk
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as well as
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the car rapidly so he cannot control the car timely. Both the mentioned reasons are traffic
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although
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the driver has a fresh driving licence.
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, I don’t think a regular driving
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will help to improve
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safety.
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, periodic driving
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test
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just
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the expenditure burden on governments
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as resultantly on individuals
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increasing the charges of a driving
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. At present, if an individual
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an appointment for
the
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a
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driving
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. He or she can book the date
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after
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2 to 3 months. There is a big question on how driving officials can manage if every year a driving
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will be enforced for each licence
holders
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.
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, it
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is just
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a waste of money, time and resources
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.
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, it is substantiated that repetitive driving
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is never an effective measure to cope with
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accidents
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.
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, the government need to think wisely to deal with
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road
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safety
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by taking some crucial steps like
an
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individual
cannot
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not
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drive
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a car on the
road
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and many more.
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