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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some think that sharing
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 regarding scientific
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,
business
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academic
research
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 is effective for
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 believe some
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 that to
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 published freely is more
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both points of view with my opinion. Access to
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 makes people enrich in different sectors. Sharing as much
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 as possible in public media about several
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 articles
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 as scientific,
business
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 and academic study is a good idea.
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Information
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 which helps
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 in order to get the latest
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 about the different field, and apply those on their life.
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, the
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 articles about the diagnosis of Covid-19 and its treatment strategies helps the physician to control coronavirus spreading and to treat Covid-19 infection. I think
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researcher
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 should share the
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their experiments.
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, some people believe that sometimes a
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 article takes more time and money.
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research
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 work involves skilled personal, equipment, money, and time, result in
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information
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, the
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 is valuable and important for the researchers
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 difficult to be shared freely.
Business
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 data on product sale,
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, which is sold by
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 organizations with paid to other
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 organization to make-up their
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 cost. So, I think,
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 may add reasonable value to access their article for
others
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. In conclusion, researchers should publish their experiment’s date as much as possible in order to access
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 and may include a few
value
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 for
those article
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 which take more money and time to conduct the experiments.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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