Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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believe that
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can play a key role to unite humans of various
cultures
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and generations . My essay
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not
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with
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statement. In my
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music
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helps to
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the stress but to unite different
cultures
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and generations,
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requires language rather than
music
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to get
people
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closer to each other.
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,
music
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can be enjoyed by anyone irrespective of the
langauge
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language
and geographical locations, but it will not help us to under the
cultures
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. For someone to understand the
culture
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of a different religion or a region,
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they have to understand their language to communicate and to learn their traditions which can not be achieved by
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.
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, my mother
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tongue
is Telugu and I am from India, by listening to the
music
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of
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African
culture
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, I can
definetly
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definitely
enjoy the
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but will not have any idea of their
culture
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, and when I do not have
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understanding of their
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,
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I
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definitely
can not get close to their customs and traditions. For these reasons, I
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that
music
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cannot play a role to combine
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people
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of different
cultures
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together.
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, as per the psychology of
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human nature,
people
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of different
age
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groups love different
music
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because of their mental and physical state.
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,
people
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at
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an
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age
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group of sixteen loves to
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fast beats with huge sounds whereas,
people
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of
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age
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the age
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group around
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the seventies
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love slow and peaceful
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.
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, we have different types of
musics
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music
kinds of music
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and different
people
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have different taste towards
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and
hence
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we cannot
relate
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music
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and
age
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together. Overall, I believe that
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will not help
people
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of different
age
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groups to connect with each other. In conclusion, certain demographics of society argue that
music
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has a great impact
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connecting the
people
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of different
cultures
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and
age
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groups. I believe that certainly,
music
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plays
key
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role in
the
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human life, but not helpful in getting the
people
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of different
cultures
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and generations together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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