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Some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe that it is getting easier. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #cities
It is argued that life in large
cities
 has become more challenging than ever while some
people
 claim that it is the opposite, in
fact
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 it is much easier. In my opinion, I would agree with the latter statement because living in big
cities
 provide
an
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easy access to all facilities that
people
 need them for their daily life. Advocates of the difficulty in living in major
cities
 believe that the cost
living
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of living
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 of
these
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cities
 has increased rapidly for the
last
 ten years. As more
people
 have increasingly been moved to
the
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large
cities
, the price of renting and buying a house has skyrocketed.
This
 is because there are more demand but lower supply , which means that residents are unable to find
an
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affordable
accomodation
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accommodation
. For that reason, dwellers of the main
cities
 suffer from the high expense of living.
On the other hand
, I believe that one of the significant advantages of living in bigger
cities
 is the accessibility to
the
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public and private facilities.
People
 can
fulfill
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 their basics and nonessentials needs at any time without the need to commute to another city. Residents of major
cities
,
for example
, can find a superior range of facilities,
such
 as schools, health cares and shopping malls.
This
 would certainly
has
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 made
people
's lives getting easier because they do not have to waste their times
in
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searching for places that meet their essentials. To sum up,
although
 it might be sensible to consider
the
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life in the main
cities
 not easier as before, I would go against
this
 view because it facilitates the process of approaching any place
people
 want to visit.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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