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Schools and teachers are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet, and they can study just as well at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schools #teachers #children #information #internet #study #home
Nowadays, since the
Internet
 can provide a wealth of
information
 for human, there is
a
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 opinion that
children
 do not need
schools
 and
teachers
 anymore, and they can study well at home with that source of
information
. Personally, I firmly disagree with that point of view and my essay will discuss the reasons. Obviously, online courses and
information
 from the
Internet
 are convenient: just by a few clicks,
children
 can access
with
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as much knowledge as they want without leaving home or pay their tuition fees at school. But the reason
schools
 and
teachers
 are still necessary is that not every
information
 from
Internet
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 is verified and
children
 may use or learn
wrong
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the wrong
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 knowledge.
Besides
,
in
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at
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the
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 early age,
children
 need
schools
 and
teachers
 to provide them
learning
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 methods in order to deal with new
information
avoid
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 overwhelming.
On the other hand
,
study
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 is not only
receive
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to receive
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 knowledge from compulsory subjects. Throughout the development of
children
, they need an environment to learn communication skills and expand social networks which
is
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 necessary before entering adulthood. Having elements of positive competition
also
 encourage them
make
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 progress and try to become successful Inconclusion, the
Internet
 is just the means to an end. It is hard for
children
 to study at home themselves and the role of
schools
 and
teachers
 still remain to be determined.
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