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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extend do you agree.

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Children
,who are citizens of tomorrow are to be handled with caution. A lot of confusions exist,whether recreational
activities
 have the upper-hand over the intense reading habit for the comprehensive development of
children
. In my opinion, spending time for some sort of enjoyments could attain
this
 required goal in
children
. I could elaborate on my views in detail in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
,
such
 enjoyment
activities
 could make
children
 not only creative but
also
 independent. When they are taught so by their parents, they could handle everything on their own.
For example
, according to the research by the child development centre in Oxford,
children
 who spend time with their parents involving in some productive enjoyment are more innovative and self-dependent on their life. Considering these above details, those moves could mould the child to complete one.
In addition
 to the innovative mind,they would develop a skill to see everything in its practical aspect.
Such
 a child would definitely have an upper-hand over bookworm
children
. For an instance, a long term comparative study conducted by a well known University between the
children
 proficient in operating Rubik's cube and book-loving ones.
Consequently
, the former group were successful in logical thinking and decision-making.
This
 itself gives evidence about the importance of practical
activities
. Whereas considering book-loving
children
, even though they would be excellent in theoretical knowledge, life in
this
 modern world would be tough for them sometimes. Since it is well known that today's world is entirely based on practical technologies. In nutshell,
children
 should be encouraged to involve in practical
activities
 rather than persuading them to read-only. It would help in the comprehensive growth of
children
.
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