Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's globalised
world
the
use
of
air
travel
is increasing day by day, by doing so
it
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invites some negative effects
such
as serious
pollution
and
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uses
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of the
world
's
fuel
resources. So, it is essential to restrict the
use
of
air
travel
to some extent.
Firstly
, the main problem associated with
air
travel
is
pollution
. Nowadays all means of
air
travel
produce many harmful gases which cause serious
pollution
of the environment.
For instance
, a plane or helicopter produces many harmful gases
such
as carbon dioxide, carbon monoxide, nitrogen oxide etc. Which is very harmful to the environment. So, it is
very
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essential to restrict the
use
of
air
travel
or to develop a new technology which can reduce
pollution
.
Furthermore
, all means of
air
travel
such
as
helicopter
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helicopters
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and
plane
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planes
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use
world's
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the world's
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fossil
fuel
in high
quantity
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quantities
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, which may cause scarcity of
fuel
in the near future. The
fuel
required for
air
travel
is
also
very costly because the
fuel
used for
air
travel
is in its pure form.
For example
, the
fuel
used by
air
travel
is more quantity compared to any other mode of transportation. So, we have to develop
such
a new technology for
air
travel
which uses renewable energy sources
such
as sun or wind.
Also
, we have to restrict the
use
of
air
travel
.
On the other hand
,
air
travel
is one of the best modes of transportation, because it is very convenient and time-saving. We can
travel
a long distance in a few hours. But, its harmful effects
such
as
pollution
and depletion of the
world
's
fuel
are not negligible. So, we have to restrict the
use
of
air
travel
. To
pen
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down, I would like to say that
pollution
and depletion of the
world
's
fuel
are a big concern for today because
it
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causes
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a harmful effect in the future. So it is essential to restrict
travel
to some extent.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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