Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think the parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are those who have the belief that spending
money
on personal
celebration
events
is the same as throwing it away, while some think that these
events
are significant both for
individuals
and communities.
This
essay discusses both points of view and
then
I will give my own opinion which is that personal
celebration
events
are important because they make
individuals
feel special and bring
people
together. On one hand, there are several reasons why throwing parties is a waste of
money
. One of them is that there are several other better uses for the
money
.
Instead
of paying for others to eat, drink and dance,
individuals
could be investing in themselves, either professionally, enrolling in some course,
for instance
, or personally,
such
as travelling.
Moreover
, parties’ arrangements are frequently stressful.
People
care about what others think of them and
this
often raises concerns while organising these
events
. They tend to become anxious since nothing can go wrong that they end up not enjoying their own
celebration
.
On the other hand
,
celebration
events
have their merits.
Firstly
, for
individuals
, it is a unique moment in their lives, when they feel special and loved since they are surrounded by
people
that care about them and are there to celebrate with them. These moments
also
become glad memories that
last
for the rest of their lives.
In addition
, for society, these
events
bring
people
closer to each other and highlight the beauty of living in a community. To conclude, both sides have their merits.
However
, in balance, I believe that personal
celebration
events
are not a waste of
money
, but enormously significant for
people
’s lives since they make
individuals
feel loved and unite communities.
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