Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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Career is one of the important

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of life. According to my point

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single

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career is good rather

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more careers . Because if we wanna make extra money

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we are good to make one

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successful

. If our one job or

business

is perfect we get good earnings. So, In

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I explain

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topic based on my personal experience and with some instances.

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and the foremost point

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, If we run our

business

with interest along the lines of up's and down's it would be good to go at the top . If we manage our career points which

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definately

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our

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good in the community .

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wer

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have employers who work there they

are not behave

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with customers

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how are

business

good so we need to improve that area . we need to talk

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employes

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you need to behave with

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customers

Furthermore

, If we start many

carees

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careers

career

and we are not good to manage all the

business

then

its wastage of money, time . And we are not good to care about our health . And health is very important to

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sucessful

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person . Family is the word in our life which is important to go through the generation . so we need some time for the family too. To sum up, everything that has been stated so far we meed a concentration , health and how we manage things .

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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