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Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment, but population and education as well. What problems will your country face in the next ten years? How can these problems be overcome?

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In the upcoming years, nations across the globe would certainly have to overcome numerous challenges stemming from schooling, population growth and habitat. According to
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India
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 a heavily populated country will face problems
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 as unemployment and inflation in the
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 decade.
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, due to coronavirus,
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 of
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 has dropped to -23% and its economy is undergoing a V-shaped recovery which has led to devastating effects on
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the employment
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 sector. A recent survey by economists has depicted that the employment rate has declined from 9.1 to 6.1 in the
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 6 months and will undergo a sharp decline in the upcoming10 years.
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, the decrease in GDP percentage has
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 in the prices of oil and raw materials.
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 the economy rate has dropped, the inflation rate has increased from 5.6 to 9.0 in the
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 six months. If the solutions to these problems are not figured out soon,
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 will most probably go into recession. In my opinion,
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 could be the best methods to tackle the challenges mentioned above. Governments should enforce some polices to mitigate taxes from small businesses
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at least
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 year.
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, it could save myriad jobs as the pandemic had the worst effect on small business owners as illustrated by the recent reports. Other than
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, to halt the
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 prices of petrol and other
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commodities
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the Indian
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 government should take
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a loan
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 from World bank or other affluent nations. Though it sounds
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, the loan amount is the only alternative
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 could save
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 from recession.
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,
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 Manmohan Singh for an instance
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 has mentioned in an interview that our country needs surplus resources to regain its prosperity which needs to be borrowed from other nations at the moment. In conclusion,
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 cannot be predicted, there could be various issues for different countries in the
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 decade but in my opinion,
India
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 will suffer from unemployment and inflation.
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, supporting small businesses and borrowing resources from other countries could be
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 solutions to tackle the unpredicted challenges.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Renewable resources
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Healthcare system
  • Pension crisis
  • Curriculum development
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning platforms
  • Lifelong learning
  • Public policy
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Green technology
  • Population density
  • Generational equity
  • Economic disparity
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