Many countries are spending a huge amount of money on supporting their competitors to take part in some worldwide sports competitions. Others argue that it would be better if these countries can spend the money on children to take part in sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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lot
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of countries in the world
who
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that
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are using
great
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amount of
money
on advertisements
of
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their teams. I agree that they should start spending
money
on
children
sport
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activities in that way they will start the encouragement of early stages in their life towards
games
. to start with
childres
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children
children's
sports ,
children
now a days
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are spending more amount
of
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time in online
games
rather than offline
games
.
this
is
effecting
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affecting
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their
heath
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coinditions
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conditions
also
. in order to overcome
this
one
countries
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should start using
money
on
childern
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children
children's
sports activities . take an example of china , using
money
on
children
at an early for their sporting
activites
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activities
.
this
is very useful in childhood
,
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because so many of them are deciding their future goals at an early age, like participating in some
games
such
as swimming,running,cricket and many more to list out.
on the other
hand
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many nations spend their most economy on people who are representing their country worldwide.it is good
upto
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up to
to
some extent , when they achieve something it would bring fame to the nation.but some are misusing it by promoting some advertisements.
this
may lead to some dissatisfaction among some people around the world.take an example of some favourite player giving
suggestion
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the suggestion
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of using some worst brand for its usage.everyone is benefited from them except the users who used showed some
disaggrement
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disagreement
. in conclusion,
government
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the government
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should start spending their amount on
children
sport
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activities when compared with other thing named spending
money
on
sport
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competitors.because if we spend
money
on the
first
purpose it would bring
great
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future to the
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child
child's
childs
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children
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