Many countries are spending a huge amount of money on supporting their competitors to take part in some worldwide sports competitions. Others argue that it would be better if these countries can spend the money on children to take part in sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There are
lot
of countries in the world Change the article
a lot
who
are using Correct pronoun usage
that
great
amount of Add an article
a great
money
on advertisements of
their teams. I agree that they should start spending Verify preposition usage
for
money
on children
sport
activities in that way they will start the encouragement of early stages in their life towards Change the noun form
sports
games
.
to start with childres
sports , Correct your spelling
children
children's
children
now a days
are spending more amount Correct the word
nowadays
of
time in online Change preposition
apply
games
rather than offline games
. this
is effecting
their Correct your spelling
affecting
heath
Correct your spelling
health
coinditions
Correct your spelling
conditions
also
. in order to overcome this
one countries
should start using Change to a singular noun
country
money
on childern
sports activities . take an example of china , using Correct your spelling
children
children's
money
on children
at an early for their sporting activites
. Correct your spelling
activities
this
is very useful in childhood,
because so many of them are deciding their future goals at an early age, like participating in some Remove the comma
apply
games
such
as swimming,running,cricket and many more to list out.
on the other
hand
many nations spend their most economy on people who are representing their country worldwide.it is good Add a comma
,hand
upto
some extent , when they achieve something it would bring fame to the nation.but some are misusing it by promoting some advertisements.Correct your spelling
up to
to
this
may lead to some dissatisfaction among some people around the world.take an example of some favourite player giving suggestion
of using some worst brand for its usage.everyone is benefited from them except the users who used showed some Add an article
the suggestion
a suggestion
disaggrement
.
in conclusion, Correct your spelling
disagreement
government
should start spending their amount on Add an article
the government
children
sport
activities when compared with other thing named spending Change the noun form
sports
money
on sport
competitors.because if we spend Change the noun form
sports
money
on the first
purpose it would bring great
future to the Add an article
a great
Correct your spelling
child
child's
childs
.Correct your spelling
children
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