Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults. What do you think is the reason for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

Today, most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
youngsters
Add an article
the youngsters
show examples
consider shopping worthwhile to spend their spare time, even it becomes a global phenomenon.
This
essay will try to identify the factors contributing to
this
issue and discuss the effects. One could think of various reasons why most
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
youth
Add an article
the youth
show examples
enjoy shopping in their free time nowadays. There is no
denial
Replace the word
denying
show examples
that
industry
Correct article usage
the industry
show examples
is always evolving to answer the market, including
beauty
Correct article usage
the beauty
show examples
sector. For instances, the current global beauty trend comes from South Korea with its own signature
products
has
Correct pronoun usage
that has
show examples
been dominating the retails.
Furthermore
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
social media is
also
responsible for spreading the hype through
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
influencers. To illustrate, Suhay Salim, a famous Indonesian beauty-vlogger with more than a million subscribers is able to influence her subscribers to purchase the
products
she had reviewed. Some people concerned about
this
social issue and the consequences for
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society.
This
business challenges the entrepreneur to proudly produce their own signature
products
. The market shows that local make-up and skin-care
products
continuously growing in number and quality built as it looks promising.
On the contrary
, most of the
young-adults
Correct your spelling
young adults
show examples
who are not yet financially wise tend to be compulsive and binge shopping over the new hype
products
. In
this
case,
Syca
Correct your spelling
Sica
, a local beauty brand reports that its newly launched lip
products
were running out of stock in the drugstore and e-commerce as well just in a few weeks. To conclude, the reason why youngsters show interest in shopping as a favourite hobby is mainly
Replace the word
that
show examples
because
Add the preposition
ofbecause
show examples
the influence of the trends.
However
, it positively affects the economic growth and the confidence of the local
products
, but they should understand what they need and well-mannered in spending money.
Submitted by medayubp on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
What to do next:
Look at other essays:

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!