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All students should study art and music in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People often debate what
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 should be taught at school. Some people argue that
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 like art, music and drama should be made as compulsory as other academic
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 from the elementary level. I totally agree with the view as learning these practical
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 improves the intellectual
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 of
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 and hones their
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 for a bright future.
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 with, these three
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 help to develop children’s imagination and interest in learning.
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Children at an early age enjoy learning through enjoyable and creative methods as they help to bind the concentration in different ways.
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, in kinder school, pupils learn alphabets more rapidly by using the rhyming technique than the traditional method.
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, it is evident that non-academic
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 play a crucial role in developing the intellectual
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 of
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, not everybody is capable of becoming a successful doctor, engineer, businessman or lawyer. Different
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 have different learning abilities. Some
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 lack interest in academics but have
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 hold on extra-curricular
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, at an early age, getting
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 experience in these
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 assists learners to develop expertise which might prove to be beneficial in future. Studies have
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 shown that In conclusion, I firmly believe that
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 like music, art and drama should be made compulsory in schools from the elementary level itself. These
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 will not only improve the intellectual
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 but
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 give them an opportunity to polish their latent talents. And
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 who have a flair for art or drama might even be able to build a career in those fields.

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