In the past，many people had skills such as making their own clothes and doing repair to things in the house. In many countries, nowadays, skills like these are disappearing. Why do you think this change is happening? how far is this situation true in your county?
People
born in the 20th century seem to be more self-dependent in housework than their contemporaries. In my eyes, this
is a natural consequence of the development of capitalism, since it has significantly lowered prices
of merchandise and made the frequent replacement of it completely affordable.
The stable decrease in prices
of daily goods motivates people
to purchase rather than repair. With the maturation of capitalism throughout the world, the division of labour is becoming increasingly efficient, which directly leads to lower prices
. When prices
are amiable, nobody will refuse to substitute a delicate product for an obsolete one. This
kind of instance is not rare. In Jinghua, a Chinese southwest town noted for frugalness, people
raced to discard their original patched clothes when economic reformation had drawn down prices
of goods. Therefore
, the versatility of people
of the past is a compromise to exorbitant costs.
With the spread of the commodity economy, this
kind of concession is seldom to be observed and my hometown is a perfect instance. About fifteen years ago, many inhabitants here were still proud of their patched clothes, which were an indication of their saving
. Fix the agreement mistake
savings
However
, the situation has totally changed. Nowadays, despite remaining to regard saving as a virtue, nobody perceives a patched cloth as an appropriate expression. They have accustomed themselves to chasing fashions and long lost the skills of stitching clothes themselves.
In conclusion, the DIY of people
living in past is the result of excessively high prices
. With the development of the commodity economy, these skills have lost their application scenarios. In the future, they may serve more for individual hobbies than for practical needs.Submitted by hx88375757 on
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The essay clearly addresses why the skillset of making clothes and repairing items is disappearing, supported by relevant and specific examples.
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