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Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

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Majority
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The majority
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 of countries minimize crimes in society by
imprisonment
. While
imprisonment
 is the most common
solution
, preventive
education
 may
also
 be useful.
Although
 I agree that
Education
 is the best long term
solution
, the importance of prisons should not be ignored. The main reason why I consider prisons as an effective
solution
 is that prisons are the most powerful providers of social justice and social security. Punishment and the risk of losing freedom
prevents
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prevent
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 criminal acts.
Also
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,Also
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 authorities take under control any illegal act and
crime
 by punishment and
imprisonment
.
Although
imprisonment
 and keeping criminals in jail have a negative impact on the budget, it is considered
as
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apply
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the best
solution
.
On the other hand
, I Consider that
education
 is the most crucial tool for
crime
 preventing. Mainly, students should be
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teaching
teached
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taught
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 about law, social justice and
consequences
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the consequences
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 of
crime
 and illegal acts.
Additionally
, the
crime
 is
also
 an act of protest
to
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against
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 social injustice and inequality. It is a fact that most criminalized regions are the regions with low educational conditions. To sum up, I strongly believe that governments are capable to minimize the number of crimes by providing equal
education
 for all regions. With the help of public
enlightenment
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,enlightenment
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 the number of crimes will be diminished.
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