some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today, because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. Do you agree or disagree?

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In our life, it has always been a controversial issue over whether

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individuals can see historical objects or

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art works

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online

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of going to

museums

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and

art

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galleries

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. As far as I am concerned, I would like to express my contradiction to

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view and my reasons are explained below. On the one hand,

people

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have a tendency of visiting cultural sites.

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is due to the fact that some

museums

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need

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to introduce

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history to visitors, which will create more job opportunities for those who are

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. From

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perspective, there are many valuable ancient monuments kept in

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experience to show the history during that period.

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, tourists can see the historical objects by

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eye, which will broaden their knowledge about the culture of other countries. An excellent example of

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would be Hoa Lo Prison which is one of the most famous places in Hanoi attracted thousands of

people

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because there were guides to introduce to them.

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, it is understandable why some

people

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are of the fervent conviction that taxes are levied on

museums

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galleries

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, which make the tickets more expensive nowadays. Indeed, the authorities should spend that revenue on health care or education

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museums

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galleries

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, it is impartial that the old and the youngsters in Vietnam who are homeless need support from society to be checked health and be taught. From a view of the social, when the emergence of

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as Covid-19, it is convenient and safer for individuals to attend gallery online.

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situation will help human being avoid infection in

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crowded. A prime example of

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would be that a gallery whose name is VCCA in Hanoi welcomed visitors via computer during the disastrous period in order to be quarantine.

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study offers

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strong proof that it is not only safer for

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during

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but

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save their money on

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. All things considered, I would

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say that there are justifiable grounds for advocating the view that it is necessary to open

museums

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art

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galleries

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prior to seeing historical objects or

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art works

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artworks

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through a screen of the computer

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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