6. There are may different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard enough nowadays?

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has become an inseparable part of life with the invasion of gadgets, as people listen to it when they are travelling, cooking, working, meditating. With the world becoming a global village, people have access to different types of
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. It is a debatable topic whether
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traditional
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or international
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is more important.
Music
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is used as a therapy as it has been scientifically proven that sound waves at different frequencies impact
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both
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and mental well being of any living being. Learning
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young age improves
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brain development.
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it is used for farming, as it is proved that calming and soothing
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encourages the blossoming of flowers, growth and for better milking of
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cattle
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value of
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culture and helps to express emotion in a very beautiful way. It is a connecting link between two generations. Traditional
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is the identity of a region,as it holds cultural values. They are very scientific and systematic. Whereas international
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is on a lighter side to compose and easily understood by
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man. They are widely accepted irrespective of caste, creed and ethnicity. Largely welcomed than traditional
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world both has
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own importance.
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has more
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with regards to a country as it holds tradition and cultural heritage and
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it needs to be preserved. To conclude,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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