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More and more people are shifting to cities from countryside. Does this have more advantages than disadvantages?

#people #cities #countryside
People
 are shifting to villages from big
cities
 and
towns
. Some
people
 consider
this
 is a positive trend because
this
 helps to reduce the problem of increasing rent in
cities
;
nevertheless
, those who find it a negative trend,
they
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apply
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state that
this
 is raising the
traffic
 problems in
cities
. On one side, the advantage of
this
 is that the problem of increasing rent in
metropolitian
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metropolitan
cities
 is decreasing because
people
 are migrating to countrysides.
Popultaion
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Population
 in
towns
 is decreasing due to
this
.
This
 leads to
decrease
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a decrease
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 in
demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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 houses. The decrease in demand for homes will eventually result in
decrease
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a decrease
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 in the prices for
residental
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residential
 properties.
This
 had become the major issue in big
cities
 worldwide, with the shifting of
people
,
this
 issue will be curbed.
For example
, rent for
residental
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residential
 properties in
Sydeny
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Sydney
 is decreasing because
people
 are
shifiting
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shifting
 to nearby areas. On the other side, the disadvantage of
this
 is that the
traffic
 congestion issues will spike in
towns
 because of
migration
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the migration
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 of
people
 from
towns
 to countrysides. Big companies and organisations are in
towns
 and big
cities
.
Further
, the shopping malls and educational institutions are
also
 in these. Employees, students and shoppers will commute to
towns
 on regular basis.
This
 will increase the
traffic
 issues in these areas.
For instance
,
people
 from nearby areas travel to
london
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London
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 on daily basis for their office work and studies.
This
deteriorate
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deteriorates
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the
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apply
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traffic
 problems and issues in big
cities
. In conclusion, the major advantage of
this
 shifting is that
this
 will help to combat the problem of increasing rental prices in
cities
;
however
,
this
 will increase the
traffic
 problems in
cities
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • overcrowding
  • economic prospects
  • commute
  • residential areas
  • social amenities
  • cultural assimilation
  • property prices
  • rural exodus
  • sustainability
  • gentrification
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