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Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued whether
punishment
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 or reward in school should place a considerate influence on students’ performance.
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 essay will discuss the two-sides of
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 problem, followed by my perspective with an appropriate conclusion. On the one hand, offering grants to
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 contributes to high spiritual on educational programs.
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 and foremost,
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 method gives students the motivation to pay attention to courses and classes.
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,
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 of going to school
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 by
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 without any contentment, scholars might exert themselves to learn by heart to achieve the highest award. The
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 point I want to mention is that the sense of ecstatic in
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 improves their ability. While having a tendency to receive a prize if they get good grades, they should feel happy, be willing to study, and acquire full knowledge and skills by chance.
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, some schools choose
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 as their preference for adjusting students' behaviour and performance. At
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, it is quite common that putting pressure on
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 by strict
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 would be successful. An illustration of
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 is that some separated pupils follow the rules and concentrate on studying for not having been punished. It is widespread acknowledgement that fear and anxiety could create some opportunities to work or study better.
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,
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 places high pressure on
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 to remind them that everything will not go in the right way.
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 of dreaming of high prizes, they should look at the dark side and develop their performance. To summarize, I could not say whether reward or
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 would improve students' abilities. Balancing two methods would be the best solution and the education system should advance
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