Some people think they have right to use as much fresh water as they want, while others believe that governments should strictly control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

fresh
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water
has
became
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to
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the
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a
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limited
resource
for human beings in recent years. Even though
people
is
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intending to invent more advanced technology to save
water
resouce
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resource
resources
, the waste
spead
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speed
spread
of
water
is definitely faster than the technology creational
spead
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speed
.
Thus
, to preserve
water
by governments is required. In
this
article, I will discuss why I agree with protecting
water
resource
and the reason why some residents still think they could use
water
as much as they want.
Firstly
, there are about only
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third
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of fresh
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fresh
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water
could
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be used by humans directly in daily life. Because the majority of
water
is from
ocean
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the ocean
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- the
salt
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saltwater
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water
.
For example
,
the
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salt
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water
could not be drunk by
people
directly, it is harmful
for
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humans' health.
Therefore
, scientists innovate technology to recycle
the
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ocean
water
to let
people
use it,
however
, the processing duration is
quit
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quite
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long and expensive. To specify, comparing with
this
solution, to save
water
by citizens is easier and more
effeciency
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efficiency
. But, there is only
limited
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a limited
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numbers of
people
prefer
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who prefer
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to save
water
by themself, in order to achieve the best result
to
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for
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this
scarce
resource
on earth, governments should define the boundary clearly for citizens
such
as controlling the
resouce
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resource
or release a law.
Moreover
,
this
is definitely a useful way to save
the
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apply
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fresh
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freshwater
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water
for longer using.
however
, some
people
still believe that they could use
fresh
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water
as much as they could, the main reason is they pay
water
fee to governments.
Therefore
, they understand
this
is only a type of
resource
such
as electricity.
Thus
, some
of
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residents
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the residents
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do not consider
this
is a scarce
resource
for the
enviornment
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environment
. To conclude, to save
fresh
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freshwater
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water
is necessary for all of us,
thus
,
government
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obviously suppose to take charge of using
water
, meanwhile, how to let some citizens
to
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understand to protect the
fresh
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freshwater
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water
is important as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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