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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The current world is very dynamic and fast with respect to the style of living and the advance work environment. Every human is working very hard and smart to stay involved in the race, but most important is the health and everyone is trying to be fit in the competition. There are various reasons to keep us healthy, the main reason is to have a strong body to do all the work and day to day activities. So to be healthy and strong, people adopt various methods or strategies ,
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 and do a regular workout, which not only keeps them healthy but make them relax and stressfree. To be a healthy person, both the activities are equally important and everyone has to understand them and start planning and implementing them in everyday life. Having said that, In India, people nowadays are conscious of their routine
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 and exercise. Youngsters are focusing more to keep their physic in shape, which is directing them to join the gym, yoga or some sports clubs to keep active. In the past we have seen, exercise was not a part of everybody's life, people who were interested in it were only adapted to do the workout. Recent India health survey shows a drastic change in the pattern and results are saying more than 65% of the population in India is healthy. The main change has been seen in
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 few years everyone is changing their eating habits and going towards hygienic food. Senior citizens and the working community have started monitoring cholesterol, fats in the body and other factors which make sure they are away from any of the health issue. It is obvious to say that person is healthy only if he or she is following a good
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 there is no other alternative to keep your life active.
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