Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination while others believe other facts like money and personal appearances are important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, it is not easy to get success in our
life
. Many masses argue that great efforts plus highly motivation
is
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indispensable to get achievements in
life
. Whereas, some consider that wealth and good look matter the most in
this
case.
This
essay will discuss both views. In my opinion, hard work is
crucial
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a crucial

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weapon to win
battle
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the battle

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of
life
. Our endeavour and single mind on work
pays
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most in our way of success.
First
of all, numerous exams just passed by a few students and multitudinous job-postings just want good marks plus intelligence which are not possible to purchase with any sort of power. Even though, with the power of notes or our beauty.
For instance
, Mahatma Gandhi put
great
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a great

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contribution
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to

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the battle
of
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for

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freedom.
Although
, he is not from
lavish
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family. But still, Indians called him, 'the father of
nation
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the nation

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'.
On the other hand
,
crowd
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a crowd
the crowd

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of folks opine that good personality
boost
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our confidence which is
must
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to improve our status in society. People can start their career in
modeling
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and in acting with good personal appearance As well as, we cannot begin our business without money. So, our bank account is demanded to become
entrepreneur
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an entrepreneur

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.
For example
, some interviewers just impressed by
well
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a well
the well

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-dressed plus confident person. To conclude, every aspect
have
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their own value. If we are from
rich
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a rich

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family plus we have good looks.
Then
, it would be
blessing
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a blessing

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but, we can't neglect hard work and passion to do something in
life
.
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