Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination while others believe other facts like money and personal appearances are important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, it is not easy to get success in our

life

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. Many masses argue that great efforts plus highly motivation

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indispensable to get achievements in

life

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. Whereas, some consider that wealth and good look matter the most in

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case.

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essay will discuss both views. In my opinion, hard work is

crucial

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weapon to win

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life

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. Our endeavour and single mind on work

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most in our way of success.

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of all, numerous exams just passed by a few students and multitudinous job-postings just want good marks plus intelligence which are not possible to purchase with any sort of power. Even though, with the power of notes or our beauty.

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, Mahatma Gandhi put

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contribution

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the battle

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freedom.

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, he is not from

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family. But still, Indians called him, 'the father of

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crowd

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of folks opine that good personality

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our confidence which is

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to improve our status in society. People can start their career in

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and in acting with good personal appearance As well as, we cannot begin our business without money. So, our bank account is demanded to become

entrepreneur

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an entrepreneur

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, some interviewers just impressed by

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-dressed plus confident person. To conclude, every aspect

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their own value. If we are from

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family plus we have good looks.

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, it would be

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but, we can't neglect hard work and passion to do something in

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

248 words

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Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination while others believe other facts like money and personal appearances are important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Waste disposal presents increasing problems, especially in urban areas. What do you think are the causes? Give some suggestions to the government and individuals on how to reduce the amount of rubbish.

Some people say that the governments should pay for health care and education but others think that this is not the government's responsibility.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?