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Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination while others believe other facts like money and personal appearances are important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, it is not easy to get success in our
life
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. Many masses argue that great efforts plus highly motivation
is
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 indispensable to get achievements in
life
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. Whereas, some consider that wealth and good look matter the most in
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 case.
This
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crucial
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a crucial
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 weapon to win
battle
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the battle
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 of
life
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. Our endeavour and single mind on work
pays
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 most in our way of success.
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 of all, numerous exams just passed by a few students and multitudinous job-postings just want good marks plus intelligence which are not possible to purchase with any sort of power. Even though, with the power of notes or our beauty.
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, Mahatma Gandhi put
great
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a great
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 contribution
in
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to
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 the battle
of
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for
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 freedom.
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, he is not from
lavish
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 family. But still, Indians called him, 'the father of
nation
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the nation
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'.
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,
crowd
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a crowd
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 of folks opine that good personality
boost
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boosts
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 our confidence which is
must
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a must
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 to improve our status in society. People can start their career in
modeling
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 and in acting with good personal appearance As well as, we cannot begin our business without money. So, our bank account is demanded to become
entrepreneur
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an entrepreneur
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.
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, some interviewers just impressed by
well
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a well
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 -dressed plus confident person. To conclude, every aspect
have
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 their own value. If we are from
rich
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 family plus we have good looks.
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, it would be
blessing
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a blessing
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 but, we can't neglect hard work and passion to do something in
life
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.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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