Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the interest of public health, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products. Do you agree or disagree?

Consumption
of
tabacco
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tobacco
Tabacco
and Smoking is very injurious to
health
. In recent times, smoking has proven to be the significant reason
of
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serious
health
issues and mortality all over the world. I extend my support for the betterment of people's
intrest
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interest
,
government
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the government
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should put
strict
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a strict
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ban on
consumption
of
tabacco
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tobacco
products
and
cigarattes
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cigarettes
.
Firstly
, smoking and
tabacco
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tobacco
products
causes
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cause
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mouth and lung
of
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apply
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cancer in
human's
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the human's
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body.
Although
, medical facilities
has
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have
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improved yet curing the patient completely becomes impossible for highly qualified doctors.As per
recent
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a recent
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report in the leading
health
magzine
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magazine
, every 5 out of 10
person
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people
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will develop mouth or lung cancer of stage 4 caused by the smoking habit or consuming
tabacco
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tobacco
products
. Out of those 5,
possibility
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the possibility
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of 2 deaths is very high.
Therefore
, it is important to put
curb
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a curb
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on these things.
Secondly
,
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the non
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non smoker
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will get highly affected by just standing
next
to the smoker.
This
is called
as
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passive smoking. Passive smoking eventually leads to many breathing related
heath
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health
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issues. Some can
also
lead to incurable
dieseases
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diseases
or severe illness.
For instance
, small children are the ones who
develops
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breathing problem like
asthema
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asthma
due to passive smoking. In conclusion,
consumption
of
cigarattes
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cigarettes
and
tabacco
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tobacco
Tabacco
products
not only affects
to
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apply
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the person who is consuming it but
also
affects a
non- user
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non-user
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. They are turning out to be the major death cause in many as it leads to cancer.
Therefere
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Therefore
,
i
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I
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agree that for the betterment of the society,
government
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the government
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should put
the
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a
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stringent ban on
consumption
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the consumption
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of
such
products
which are very
harmfull
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harmful
to human
health
.
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