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Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your opinion.

#products #countries
Due to
globalisation
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,globalisation
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 there is freedom of trade and people buy and sell goods and services from one
country
 to another.
This
 increases relation between the
countries
, which in turn, facilitates the growth of
economy
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the economy
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.
This
 essay will highlight the pros and cons of purchasing goods from other places. Some cities have favourable climate, manpower and resources to produce a particular product.
For example
, the middle eastern
countries
 are known for selling coffee as their cocoa beans are tasty and
world famous
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.
Hence
, due to the demand, other places tend to import from these
countries
.
This
 increases the supply and
therefore
, increases the monetary exchange between these
countries
.
Also
, people tend to buy goods from
countries
 where the money currency exchange rate is less but the product quality is good.
Hence
,
this
 trade will have a positive effect on their economy.
Conversly
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Conversely
, some citizens feel that traders should not import, rather cultivate or make use of the existing resources which the
country
 produced.
This
 will help to circulate the money
withing
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within
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 the
country
, thereby facilitating an increase in the revenue for the farmers. These people are against the idea of external trading and opt to support local markets
instead
. To conclude, looking at both
the
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views, I feel that it is buying and selling from another
country
 proves much more beneficial than circulating produces within the state. If trading is done effectively,
then
 many
countries
 will benefit from it.
Also
, resources and manpower can be shared which will help boost the economy.
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