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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

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Unequivocally,due to the dominance of mainstream international
languages
such
 as English,Spanish and French, many public schools put less emphasis on the aboriginal
language
 of a particular region which has attributed to the extinction of many vernacular
languages
 spoken across the world.Against the prevailing trend of investing more in widely spoken international
languages
,
i
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 believe regional
languages
 should be given as much importance as international
languages
 by a particular government.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of
this
 argument. It goes without saying that in today's globalized world it has become crucial to become well-versed with world
languages
 as the understanding of
such
languages
 can pave the way to new opportunities.
For instance
,if a person knows the English
language
, which is recognized all across the globe than he gets an edge over the competition as he can communicate effortlessly with other foreign professionals in his professional field.Thereby,looking at the vast popularity of
such
 a
language
,many people hold the opinion that it would be best to spend public money to teach
children
 English
instead
 of their aboriginal
language
. On the other side,there is a school of thought that believes,if native
languages
 are not taught to the
children
 in their formative years
then
 it would be a big blow to the tradition of a particular region because reluctance to their traditional literature will extinct the cultural values from
children
.To quote an instance,
children
 who are not acquainted with their national
language
 have apathy towards their local art,culture and tradition.
That is
 why,to sustain their local values, many governments put extra emphasise on learning regional
languages
. To conclude,knowing the native
language
 is as important as knowing any other
language
 because it not only helps to preserve traditional values but
also
 helps people to have lucrative opportunities in the domestic as well as the international environment.
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