people are becoming famous with the help of tv programmes and the internet .discuss the advantage and disadvantages .

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wide web makes the ordinary individual
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a popular person.
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techonology
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technology
makes a person well known globally it has both
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its benefits and drawbacks.
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the final
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decision
.
firstly
, the main advantages are ,without much effort it gives an opportunity to become a
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figure internationally,
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it could benefit them to upgrade their prospects in life.to illustrate,nowadays it has been very easy to open a youtube channel and with the increased num,ber of subscribers we can become famous and the youtube channel provides money after the quantity of
subcribers
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subscribers
increases.
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financilly
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financially
also
they may become
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person.
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more exposure to these channels has created several social issues like hacking personal information and lack of privacy.
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social media ,unauthorization access
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photos of them is often seen
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.
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their privacy.
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they cannot engage freely in most of the occasions.
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, recently in
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the photos of the actress as been used for an advertisement without her consent ,where she filed
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a case
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against that organisation. to conclude, mass media and
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internet gives
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people
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the
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enormous level of benefits,
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it has some adversities. Albeit of its drawbacks, the conscientious individuals obligation to obey rules and regulations to evade disputes. I believe ,in
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the pros
overweighs
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the cons to a certain level.
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