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Some people believe that media should be allowed to publish information about the private lives of famous people. Others say that everybody has a right to privacy and this practice must be controlled or even stopped. Discuss both views. Some people believe that media should be allowed to publish information about the private lives of famous people. Others say that everybody has a right to privacy and this practice must be controlled or even stopped. Discuss both views.

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Now a days
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media
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 is so active that they are publishing the private
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 of the famous without even taken the consent of them. Some
people
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 think
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 should be allowed and
other
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 think
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 as everyone have
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 to keep
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 private life in privacy. In my view
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 is wrong and
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 or even stopped. As the world is more advance and
people
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up to
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technology and
media
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.
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 when it
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 to
media
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,
media
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 is the one of the most important
sorce
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source
 of
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 from which we can get of the
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 about anything like sport, politics, weather forecast, about famous
people
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 or celebrities, etc.
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Media
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 is doing
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 of good work and showing the general public the true face of democracy, etc.
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, for TRP,
Media
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 is doing whatever they can do like they are publishing the private
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 of famous
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 and celebrities, etc. without even taking
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consent from them.
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give
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 popularity to the
media
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 channel but at the same time,
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 will put
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 negative impact on that person.
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: In my
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 India,
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media
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the media
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 do publish the personal info of the celebrities to get the
trp
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top
 for there channel. In my
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this
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 is wrong to expose or to
telecaste
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telecast
 the privacy of any person because everyone
have
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right
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the right
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 to have their known privacy and
media
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dont
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don't
 have any right to telecast it without any consent from them. Therefor some control or restriction should be put on the
media
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 or some legal action should be taken on
media
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 for doing all
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.
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, In conclusion,
Media
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 should think before telecasting
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anything
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 which is personal and
government
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the government
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 should take some legal action if anything unnecessary is been publish by
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media
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the media
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public figures
  • private individuals
  • free press
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • corruption
  • unethical behaviour
  • public interest
  • right to privacy
  • intrusion
  • psychological impact
  • loss of reputation
  • personal safety
  • ethical guidelines
  • responsible journalism
  • regulations
  • expose
  • media scrutiny
  • misuse
  • balance
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