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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Agree or disagree?

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The growth of the e-commerce industrial influences more every year to offline magazines. I absolutely agree with that fact and support it. The essay aims to show the advantages of online shops against current retailers
such
 as comfort and flexibility. Because e-commerce does not need ordinary showrooms, customers spend less
time
 shopping. They do not need to take a taxi or drive their own car to reach the place.
Besides
, clients could choose a product in a couple of clicks on the web site.
For instance
, the
last
time
 it takes just 10 min for me to buy a phone rather than early I went to a shop by car.
Moreover
, if a product did not suite I would call the delivery and ask them to replace it.
On the other hand
, I would spend so much more
time
 if bought goods offline.
Furthermore
, a customer, who uses
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 online services, becomes happy and using them gets more comfortable. He or she uses just a phone and a lot of company provide a little place for trying goods,
for example
, if I buy a t-shirt I can pick nearest a place and try it quickly.
In addition
, like
this
 approach provides more than just comfortable shopping, it gets a lot of free
time
 for people in order for other companies to get a profit
also
.
For instance
, many people become to spend there holidays on small travelling around there nearest regions. In conclusion, e-commerce deffenetlly helps neither itself, but the other industrials are improved. Eventually, the main point is that customers should be satisfied.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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