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In the future, nobody will buy printed books or newspaper because they will be able to read whatever they want online without paying. TO what extent do you agree or disagree?

#future #nobody #books #newspaper
The sources of reading have been changing nowadays compared to the past. Some people argue that in the forthcoming
days
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 offline
books
 and
newspapers
 would become outdated and people can relay online for reading
with
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free of cost. While I agree that online platforms will be popular in the future,
however
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,however
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 I will not support that
it
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they
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 will be available without paying.
Need
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of
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for
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 a computer or a mobile phone and use of
internet
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the internet
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 will
proove
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prove
this
.
To begin
 with, it is the fact that , technology has been increasing rapidly and it
affect
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 all the sectors of human life. Most
evidentily
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evidently
 ,
use
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the use
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 of printed
books
 and
newspapers
is
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are
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 very rare and most of the people in the society depend on
e-
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e-books
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books
 and e-
newspapers
. The prime reason behind
this
 trend is that technology is readily available and is less
time consuming
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time-consuming
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.
Moreover
, in
this
 hectic
lifestyle
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,lifestyle
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 no one has the time to purchase
a
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apply
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printed
books
 and
newspapers
,
hence
 they turn into remote reading.
On the other hand
,
although
 online
books
 are available
with in
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within
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 a
finger tip
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fingertip
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, nobody could afford
it
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them
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with
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apply
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free of cost .
Furthermore
 ,
inorder
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in order
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 to use
this
 facility a person could own a computer or mobile phone which will not run without
an
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apply
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internet
 and is payable.
For instance
, as
every one
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 knows to aid the help of computers and mobile phone there must be an
internet
 subscription which will be payable as monthly or annually.
Thus
 , there is no fact in arguing that in the future online reading will be free. To conclude,though online reading is in its
fastest growing
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fastest-growing
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, nothing will be available without paying money.
Therefore
 in the upcoming
years
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,years
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 we can aid the
acility
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facility
 of
internet
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the internet
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 in reading by paying with money only.
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