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The family has a great influence on children’s development, but the influence from outside the home plays a bigger part in children’s life. Do you agree or disagree.

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Nowadays, there are truckloads of information from all around the world that are bombarding our daily lives every
second
.
Children
 are being impacted by everything
that is
 outside their home a lot, the role that these affected play is outweighing the family education. I am completely standing on the same view with
this
 statement. On one hand,
children
 tend to perceive the world by themselves rather than being taught by their
parents
.
This
 can be evidenced by the stubborn performances or grumpy personalities that
children
 show occasionally. In fact, some
parents
 found that their kids start to challenge themselves at the age of 2 or 3, by shouting at the
parents
 to stop them from touching or moving their toys.
This
 is because they think that their family members are deterring them from exploring the world. In a word, the effect of family education on
children
 is limited.
On the other hand
, society can easily instil an adverse idea into
children
’s mind. An undeniable truth is that the number of juvenile crimes is continuously increasing over the past decades.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by the local government evinced that the ages of the criminals are getting younger. Most of them committed their
first
 crime at the age of 14 and was seduced by a “big brother” that they knew from a gang. These results are obviously indicating that the
children
 can be easily enticed by the people or the matters outside their home. In conclusion,
although
 the family can limitedly affect
children
’s development, the energy of the impacts of society is excessively exceeding the one from
parents
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nurturing environment
  • emotional and psychological development
  • foundational stone
  • external influences
  • diverse perspectives
  • digital media
  • peer pressure
  • social circles
  • intellectual development
  • structured knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • cultural and societal norms
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