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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technology revolutionized our lives in a variety of fields including education over the past decades. Truckloads of academic institutes are now allowing their
students
 to attend e-
classes
 online. While remote
classes
 benefit a lot but I personally believe that onsite
classes
 cannot be substituted. Admittedly, e-learning permits convenience to
students
 who have limited access to the campus,
such
 as oversea
students
. In most cases, online courses fulfil the educational objects. International
students
 might have limited language skills in the local environment, and taking remote
classes
 obviously is an ideal option for them to achieve their graduation goal. E-
classes
 not only help those who are not familiar with the language, but
also
 allow people to review the
classes
 repetitively, and
therefore
 improve the learning efficiency.
However
, the video of the class through the internet could be recorded and
hence
 the lecturer may not be accessible. One of the vital importance advantages of onsite
classes
 is that pupils can have instant feedback for their questions. Some subjects are theoretical, and the content could lead to misunderstanding.
Students
 will not be able to absorb the knowledge once there is an impediment occurs during his or her studying. In
this
 case, asking a question and getting an instant answer could resolve the problems that are obstacles for the pupil who are attending in the classroom.
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 online study has given up
this
 tremendous advantage of in campus courses, and leave those impediments that are not getting resolved immediately alone. In conclusion,
although
 distance learning by networking has benefits
such
 as overcoming xenophobia, it cannot outweigh the onsite
classes
 as it cannot resolve
students
’ problems instantly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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