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In future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Exploring new places has always been a desire of
people
. Taking into consideration
this
 pandemic situation would not allow
people
 to
travel
 from one
country
 to another.
As a result
,
people
 would prefer to spend their holidays in their own
country
. But I completely disagree that travelling to a new
country
 would be difficult. One of the significant factors is that planning to
travel
 to different countries is mainly focused on exploring the new culture and environment.
For example
, a family like ours living in Kuwait, which is entirely a desert would always prefer to
travel
 to international destinations. Kuwait is a very small place to explore and the entertainment here is very less. Children
too
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 do not have many options to have fun or even explore the outdoors. They have to keep themselves occupied indoors.
Furthermore
, travelling to countries with various cultural and historical sites is fascinating. It helps us to try different foods, types of clothing and view their lifestyle as closely as possible. History has always played a significant part,
therefore
 exploring ancient stories and artefacts they have used during ancient times is well established.
People
 are inquisitive in reaching out to new places. Children get to enjoy and at the same time acquire knowledge on new aspects as they experience it in person. Travelling being a stress-buster keeps us more curious as well as relaxed when moved towards a longer distance. In order to conclude, I disagree with the statement that
people
 would prefer to spend their holidays
within
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 their
country
. It is only the pandemic situation that has made an inevitable role to
travel
 internationally. Once the disease has been eradicated and the restrictions have come to an end travelling abroad would tremendously increase. Now,
people
 are just
contrained
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constrained
contained
 to
this
 situation which would change in the near future. Enjoying within the native places are good but can never be matched to an international trip.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
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