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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 argue that in the future
people
 will prefer to stay in their home country
instead
 of travelling abroad for a holiday. I totally disagree with them since
individuals
 enjoy learning about other cultures and because of the advance in technology
people
 are influenced by others to visit different countries. The main reason why I believe there will always be those who will choose to travel abroad is that
people
 love the thrill of experiencing a new culture.
Although
 I concede that staying in their own country can be more convenient, I believe that
individuals
 like to seek adventure when they are travelling. Having the opportunity to visit a place
that is
 totally different from what they are used to, maybe learning a new language and trying different food is extremely exciting and enriching.
Consequently
,
people
 want that. Even though it can be challenging sometimes, it gives one a sense of achievement which is partially what makes it so desirable since
people
 have to overcome some of their fears and limitations in order to do it. Another reason is that with the Internet
individuals
 are daily exposed to different realities. With the use of ,social-media one is constantly shown the beauties of different places around the world.
As a result
, they get interested in visiting and experiencing the amazing features of those locations themselves, not only over a screen but in person. To illustrate, in Brazil there are digital influencers that live to travel all over the globe and share their experiences with their followers which causes desire on others to do the same. In conclusion, I reaffirm my opinion that
individuals
 will continue to travel abroad in the future since they are keen on learning about different cultures and with the constant use of social media they are encouraged to visit other countries.
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