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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation the advantages ?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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It is irrefutable that good health is one most prized. possession. In
this
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 trend, there is no doubt that the majority of
people
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use
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chemicals
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 in
food
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production
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 , which is extremely harmful to our body , whereas these
chemicals
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 are useful to preserve the
food
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 for a long time. now I would like to explore my viewpoints on
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 statement before forming a conclusion. To embark on, there is various harmful effect adding
chemicals
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 in
food
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production
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 on an individuals health. The
first
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 and foremost reason is that netizens
use
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 the chemical in
food
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 because they want high yield
production
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. these
chemicals
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 put a bad effect on our body and
people
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 suffer from numerous disease.
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, those
chemicals
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 which are used in
food
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production
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, reduce the quantity of
food
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. For ,example the nutrition value of
food
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 will decrease for using
chemicals
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.
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, these
chemicals
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 are lead to harm to the human body.
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, everyone is busy with his own work and their schedule and they do not have enough time to cook
food
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food
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. Due to
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 , they always ready to eat packaged
food
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.
food
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 producers
use
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 a preservative method to preserve the
food
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 for a long time , but it declines the neutral value of
food
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. Apart from that, preserve
food
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 create some health problem, due to the
use
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 of the harmful chemical on it. Every coin has two sides . These are some advantages
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. It is easily available and easy to cook.
People
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 can get
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food
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 from anywhere. Producers gain more income because they produce more
food
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 so that they increase productivity. By the way of conclusion, excess of everything is bad so that manufactures should
use
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chemicals
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 in a limited way and
people
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 should prefer homemade
food
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 rather than packaged
food
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.
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