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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel it is a positive trend but others don’t. Give your opinion.

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Travelling to other
countries
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 for leisure and vacation is becoming increasingly popular these days. Some
people
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 consider
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 to be a good thing.
However
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, a part of society is opposed to
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 trend, claiming that it has a number of negative implications. In the following paragraphs, I'd like to express my viewpoint.
Tourism
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 is critical to any country's economy because it generates employment and brings invaluable foreign currency. There are a few
countries
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,
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 as Hong Kong and Thailand, where
tourism
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 contributes a significant portion of their GDP, and
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, nations encourage
tourism
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 to boost their economies.
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 to
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, faster modes of transportation, lower travel rates, and increasing per capita income are only a few of the factors that have led to the popularity of leisure travel to other
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.
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, foreign travellers contribute to social and cultural interaction by informing
people
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 about the values and traditions of other
countries
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 and thereby bringing
people
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 around the globe together.
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, there is a subset of
people
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 who believe that global
tourism
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 has resulted in cultural dilution. When
people
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 from different cultures visit a country, they impose their values on the locals, causing a dent in local values and traditions.
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, increased
tourism
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 has been linked to environmental damage. Coral reef damage in Australia, caused by divers is an example of
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. In conclusion, while global
tourism
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 has caused some issues, I believe that the increase in international
tourism
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 has resulted in many significant positive developments that have benefited nations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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