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Q. Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Different
languages
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 which
has
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 been used in our life die out every year. Some
people
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 believe that even if there are
small
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a small
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 number of
languages
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 exist in the world, life would be easier. I
also
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 agree that
extinction
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the extinction
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 of
languages
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 does not affect
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humans.
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 every state has
their
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 own
language
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 to communicate
each
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with each
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 other,
people
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 focus on an international
language
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 to develop global networking-called Globalization.
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, English has become a popular
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languages
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language
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 all over the earth for making contact with other nations.
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, using several
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 among the different countries, making communication would be uncomfortable due to fewer knowledge of other states’
languages
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. So, I think
people
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 are more comfortable
to use
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 a unique one for communicating with the
people
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 of other nations. Learning various
languages
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 for a person is
difficult
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a difficult
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 and
time consuming
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time-consuming
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 task. For
this
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 reason, one should learn a common speech
which
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 is worldwide acceptable.
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, different states of India has
an individual
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an individual language
individual languages
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languages
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, but
Indian
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 government declared that as the official purposes everyone must
be follow
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English
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the English
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Language
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.
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, every school’s authorities design their curriculum with compulsory English
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.
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, China only
concentrate
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concentrates
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 on their own mother tongue resulting in chines are not able to make contact with
other person
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another person
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 who
live
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 in another country.
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 why
,
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apply
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 I believe that die out of some
languages
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 is not necessary because
of
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life simpler using fewer
languages
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 in the world. In conclusion, in
this
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 globalization era, everybody should focus on a unique
language
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 to make global networking. Dying out of some
languages
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 does not make any harm in the world.
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