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1. Many people believe that the internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support you position.

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In recent times, the
internet
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 has become a trend. Many
people
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 seem to think that the
internet
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 has made
major
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 impact on their
lives
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 because it has become more popular than
the
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television
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. I strongly agree with
this
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 statement because
,
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 I personally have benefited positively from the impact of the
internet
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 in my daily life.
Firstly
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, the use of technology has become very popular amongst
people
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,
hence
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, the
internet
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 has become very useful in our daily
lives
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 because we have been able to access all kinds of information online and
also
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 make important transactions that
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 improved the
lives
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 of
people
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.
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, in the past, if you wanted to make a reservation for hotel, flights, vacation packages, you had to either make the booking through an agent or visit the booking offices. These days , the
internet
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 has made everything easier, at the touch of a button, you are given the opportunity to pick what you want and
then
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 proceed to make payments as you wish.
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, many
people
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 have become dependent on the use of the
internet
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 to make important decisions in their
lives
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 .
Furthermore
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, the
internet
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 has provided the opportunity for individuals to earn money.
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, these days, online jobs have become trendy, it has piqued
people
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's interest
therefore
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, many
people
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 apply for these jobs and are given the option of working from home.
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,
the
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television
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 has lost its importance in
people
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's life because with the advancement of technology,
person's
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people
person
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 can now afford
smart phones
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smartphones
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.
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, they can view the
news
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 and other important
happeneings
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happenings
 in
real time
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 rather than, wait on the
news
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 to be read on the
television
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. The
internet
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 has given the public access to all sorts of
news
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 and information
Infact
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In fact
, most
news
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 agencies now have their applications on mobile devices because they recognize that, they can not compete with the
internet
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. In conclusion, the
internet
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 has become very popular and has replaced
the
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television
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 because
,
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people
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 can now view whatever programme
that
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interests them on the go. In my opinion, the
internet
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 has made our daily
lives
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 easier and more approachable.
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