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Some believe that the Olympic games help bring people from different nations together, while others claim that holding the Olympics wastes money which could be used for important issues. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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There are many who claim that holding the
Olympic
games
 brings
variety
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 of country's together while others think that it is a waste of financial resources which can
be use
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 in more pressing issues. I strongly believe that
Olympic
 is an event that helps to bring nations together for
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one common goal. The game has brought about the best in most of the
countries
 while putting a pause to
differances
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differences
 among them.
To begin
 with, it gives a common platform to all sportsmen irrespective of their colour, race, gender to come together and compete to achieve the
heighest
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highest
 achievement any athlete can achieve in their life.
In addition
 to
this
, all athletes around the world
gets
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 an opportunity to share their culture, experience and improve
camraderie
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camaraderie
. As an example, nations like China, Russia and the United State of America who
are
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 in
real time
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war ready
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countries
 put aside
there
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differances
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differences
 and compete in the name of
sportsmenship
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sportsmanship
 which increase the understanding among them.
Finally
, holding the
Olympic
games
 will help not only the athletes who are competing but
also
 the whole world to understand
differant
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different
 cultures and people around us
On the other
hand
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 holding
an
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Olympic games
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Olympic
games
 require
substantial
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 amount of investment from
countries
.
Firstly
, the holding country will have to either upgrade the existing infrastructure or build them from scratch to meet the required standards which will put some of the
countries
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 a spot of bother,
interms
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in terms
 of the financial capability. As an example, Brazil went
bankrupcy
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bankruptcy
bankrupt
 after obtaining loans from
differant
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different
 institutes to build
there
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 stadiums which
was
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 only used for the
games
.
Furthermore
,
countries
 can go
in to
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 debt traps by
such
 actions simply because the governments only
thinks
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 of the publicity and the image they could get by holding
such
event
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an event
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 In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
 there are only financial concerns which
is
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 arising from holding an event
in
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this
 magnitude,
countries
 should get together and support the holding
countries
 to meet the requirements so that the huge amounts of benefits can be reaped effectively for the host country and the world.
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