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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people
work
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 in the same
company
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 during their entire working career because they are given a
lot
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 of benefits from the organisation while others believe that it is better to
work
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 for different organisations. In my opinion , a person should check whether he is comfortable in that
company
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 and
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 apply for various organisations only if he going through a
lot
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 of pressure. The following essay will provide a detail explanation of both these opinions.
To begin
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 with, some people like to
work
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 in the same
company
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 as they get a huge
amount
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 of facilities from the
company
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. For an instance , employees get a good
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 of increment based on their hard
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.
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, they get a
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 of opportunities for working
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 various projects and due to that fact , they get a chance to explore various types of
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.
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, if a person is working in
multinational
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company
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 , he will receive a good hike in salary and
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 will get a
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 of opportunities to
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 in various foreign countries.
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 to that , many of them receive meal coupons that can be used to try various types of cuisines.
On the other hand
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, some of them believe that it is better to
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 for various organisations and there are many reasons behind
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 view .
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, if people are not getting a sufficient
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 of hike in their salaries , they will decide to leave the
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 and apply elsewhere.
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, if they are not getting
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enough
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 of experience in various projects , it is better to search for another job .
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 , if an IT professional does not get
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enough
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 of experience in various technologies , he will definitely apply for another job. To conclude , I opine that a person should examine whether that job is suitable for him and after that , he should decide whether he should search for another
company
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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