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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think advantage of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

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It has become a controversial topic and many argue that the
museum
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 should levy
fees
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 to visitors. I opine with
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 line of thought and will enunciate upon both aspects of the debate before reaching an appropriate conclusion. On the one hand, entry
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 of the
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 to the tourists have many benefits for the institution.
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, the management can well maintain the ancient artefacts with the funds collected through the visitors. The managing committee does not have to rely on external donations.
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, the target audience who have an interest in historical events will only visit the place.
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 audience will have more opportunity to learn as window shoppers will stay from visiting.
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, the income generated from the
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 will help in the growth of the
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.
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 fund can be utilized to purchase more ancient artefacts from any part of the globe.
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, Gandhi Ashram, one of the major attraction of the city, has been recently refurbished with the money collected from the tourists.
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, the only demerit of levying visiting charges is that the underprivileged
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 will be deprived of the knowledge and the entertainment from the national property. These
people
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 have the same rights on these articles as the ones who are rich.
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, there are many poor
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 who follow Mahatma Gandhiji ideology but are unable to visit his
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 because of hefty entry charges. To sum up, undoubtedly, considering the shortfall that
people
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 with less money will be not able to visit the
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.
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, I am of the firm opinion that the merits of imposing the entry
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 are far many, as aforementioned, and outweighs the disadvantages as it helps the institution to develop and maintain without depending upon grants.
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